Tactical Destroyed
Lt. Curie’s boots tapped the tiled floor at ruin’s edge. She began collecting gaseous chemical data prone to dissipate before forensic equipment arrived.
Her bio-assistant gasped. “That bomb did a number.”
Lt. Curie wheeled on her heel. “Refrain from voicing your opinions.” She deleted the superfluous remark and focused on the debris. Searching…searching…
She watched as investigator bots removed charred interfaces and twisted supports from Major Bohr’s inert form. Simultaneous with the blast, his link had gone silent. Wiring protruded from his face. Curie stored the image in a sub-folder, <Memory>, nested in a sub-folder, <Revenge>.
Friday Fictioneers: 100-word stories
photo prompt: J. Hardy Carroll
Muninn's Memories 
May 24, 2017 at 9:07 am
Ooh, this is so good. Fantastic last line. Opens up all sorts of possibilities.
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May 24, 2017 at 10:12 am
Thank you so much.
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May 24, 2017 at 11:07 am
Oooh. Nice piece, Kecia. I particularly liked the visual cues and formatting that reinforced the functions of the android (at least that’s how I imagined Lt. Curie, perhaps she is something different). Such as “Searching…searching…” and “stored the image in a sub-folder, , nested in a sub-folder, .”
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May 24, 2017 at 11:30 am
That’s exactly what I want to hear!
This piece is a rewrite (to fit the 100-word format) of the opener to the story I’ve been working on for Clarkesworld. I found some ideas while writing it that I want to incorporate into what I currently have.
You might be interested to know Lt. Curie is a character from the Pansy universe.
I only wish I had more hours in the day. I haven’t touched this in a long time.
Thanks for the feedback. It’s good to know I’m going in the right direction.
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May 24, 2017 at 11:40 am
Fascinating! I feel the immensity of Pany’s universe, even though I’ve only read a few stories with small glimpses into it.
That’s so funny. I was just thinking about our conversation about Clarkesworld earlier this morning, because I have it on my to-do list to select a horror magazine and start studying it and writing a story with a that publication in mind (this has been on my to-list for months, I really should do something about that). Which led me to wonder how your story for Clarkesworld was coming along.
And you’re welcome. 🙂
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May 25, 2017 at 2:32 am
Loved this, Kecia.
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May 25, 2017 at 8:34 am
😀 Thank you, Neel!
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May 25, 2017 at 7:40 am
Okay, so now you need to go back and tell us the whole story 🙂
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May 25, 2017 at 8:36 am
That’s one of my long-term goals. I continue to develop characters and scenes and write short stories based on my notes for the novel, but haven’t put it all together yet. Some day.
Thanks for reading and commenting.
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May 25, 2017 at 11:51 am
Love this take on the prompt. Love the last line. Very creatively written.
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May 25, 2017 at 12:20 pm
Thanks for taking time to comment. I appreciate it!
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May 25, 2017 at 12:14 pm
Cleverly done.
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May 26, 2017 at 3:42 pm
You left me wanting to know more, I often think that taking part in FF is a good way to hone writing
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May 26, 2017 at 7:55 pm
It’s a good way to develop characters. Thanks, Michael.
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May 26, 2017 at 9:01 pm
This was great, Kecia. Like the others have said, that last line sure opens up possibilities!
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May 27, 2017 at 8:55 am
Hopefully, it opens up an entire novel because I have one sketched for it. Thank you for commenting.
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May 27, 2017 at 4:34 am
Great bit of sci-fi. I’ll say it again even though everyone else seems to have done, great last line
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May 27, 2017 at 8:54 am
Thank you. I appreciate it.
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May 27, 2017 at 10:02 am
While this scene stands alone, It would make a great opening hook for a longer sci-fi thriller mystery. It seems Major Bohr’s end came violently. Good terms used in the writing, Kecia. 🙂 — Suzanne
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May 27, 2017 at 1:57 pm
Thank you for the feedback.
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May 28, 2017 at 2:03 am
Oh, this is excellent. Great use of language to create a much bigger story.
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May 28, 2017 at 5:48 am
Thank you for commenting.
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May 28, 2017 at 12:40 pm
Super last line. It says so much. Great use of terms and language.
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May 28, 2017 at 5:45 pm
Thank you, Alicia.
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