Tommy Lee’s Tract
Near the top of Copperhead Ridge, I helped Mabel Ann down from the truck. Forty acres of our own, a wedding gift from Pa.
I taught Mabel to malt barley, crush corn, add yeast, and strain. She’d taught me so much more. Green earth was wondrous; stars made me weep; nothing compared to Mabel’s belly swelling under my hand.
Must have been the distillation smoke. A man wearing a pistol on his hip and a badge had handcuffed Mabel, too heavy to run. Home from hunting, I raised my Winchester. There’s right and there’s wrong.
Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: 100-word stories.
photo credit: Tim Livingston
March 14, 2017 at 10:04 am
That escalated quickly.
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March 14, 2017 at 10:09 am
Unless you’re Tommy. Then you figure another five minutes would have been too late. 🙂
Thanks for reading and commenting, James!
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March 14, 2017 at 10:17 am
Excellent story! I could really feel the mood. I think he is going to save Mabel from the sheriff. Loved it! Welcome to the FFfAW challenge. We are happy you have joined us!
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March 14, 2017 at 10:25 am
Thank you. I’ve been lurking and really liked the picture this week. Glad to be here.
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March 14, 2017 at 10:36 am
I’m glad you liked the photo prompt this week and decided to participate. Your story is great!
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March 14, 2017 at 10:50 am
Thank you for saying so. I liked the idea a lot. As a personal challenge, I kept it at 100. I think it was 97.
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March 14, 2017 at 11:10 am
I often keep my stories to 100 words or less just for the challenge of it.
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March 14, 2017 at 11:12 am
It’s really good practice for finding the essential points of the plot. Then, later, the details can be filled in. One of my favorite stories, Earthbound, is a 300 word flash I wrote up from a 100.
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March 14, 2017 at 12:01 pm
That is very interesting Kecia!
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March 14, 2017 at 10:47 am
Superb Kecia – I was just as surprised as the police. I am still alive though 😉
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March 14, 2017 at 10:49 am
Hehe. Thank you. I’m glad you liked it.
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March 14, 2017 at 11:50 am
Now I want to know more about Mabel Ann. Great writing.
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March 14, 2017 at 12:25 pm
Thank you. I find it interesting when people add things to the story that I didn’t imagine.
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March 14, 2017 at 1:53 pm
This story was just right.
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March 14, 2017 at 2:04 pm
Thank you. ❤
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March 14, 2017 at 3:19 pm
Oooh well now, I would like to know more about Tommy and Mabel, that’s for sure!
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March 14, 2017 at 3:37 pm
Just two people not asking anything from anyone except to be left alone. That’s a hard thing to find these days. Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment.
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March 14, 2017 at 8:48 pm
Lovely piece of writing with so many questions to ask.
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March 14, 2017 at 9:14 pm
Thank you.
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March 15, 2017 at 3:51 am
That leaves my mouth gaping in wonder. Good piece of writing Kecia.
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March 15, 2017 at 10:16 am
Thank you, neel. I was afraid I might have left too much implied, but your words reassure me.
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March 15, 2017 at 9:34 pm
Just trying to make a living,, until Johnny Law shows up. Nice one Kecia
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March 15, 2017 at 9:56 pm
That says it. Thank you for commenting. It’s really appreciated.
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March 16, 2017 at 5:20 am
Brilliant. It’s left me wanting more!
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March 16, 2017 at 6:43 am
You’re very kind to say so. Thank you so much.
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March 16, 2017 at 4:53 pm
I wonder what had happened to make the police after them? They seemed like a happy content couple. Love doesn’t the story
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March 16, 2017 at 5:02 pm
Hi. Ameena. Welcome to my blog. I’m glad you liked the story. I’m sorry you missed parts of it. Probably my fault for not being clearer. The clues are in the recipe Tommy teaches Mabel Ann, the ingredients for corn whiskey, and in the “distillation” smoke.
Making moonshine and selling it was outlawed during Prohibition, but it didn’t stop anyone. Not unless they got caught.
History now. 🙂
Thank you for visiting. I hope you come again.
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March 16, 2017 at 5:49 pm
Ohhh, hahaha, my mistake actually. I am not versed, at all, in that so I had no idea what moonshine was until now. Thank you very much for explaining it to me now.
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March 16, 2017 at 5:51 pm
I hope it makes sense now. Thanks again for visiting. 🙂
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March 17, 2017 at 7:51 am
A perfect flash.
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March 17, 2017 at 8:19 am
*blushes* Thank you.
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March 17, 2017 at 2:21 pm
Ha! Funny. My story is also on moonshining. Loved yours!
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March 17, 2017 at 2:23 pm
Hi. Funny. Thank you for reading.
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